tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post3188347050248414409..comments2023-10-30T06:59:23.320-07:00Comments on Disgruntled Bear: Novel Pitch #1: SWIMMING TO TOKYOUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-12385582896763677802015-10-04T21:27:27.192-07:002015-10-04T21:27:27.192-07:00I say many thanks to Mr. admin website I read this...<br />I say many thanks to Mr. admin website I read this, because in this website I know a lot of information information that I did not know before his<br /><br /><a href="http://goo.gl/yAXg6c" rel="nofollow">Tips Pengobatan Benjolan Di Leher</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/BrBClM" rel="nofollow">Obat Penghilang Penyakit Batu Empedu</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/tepRzE" rel="nofollow">Terapi Penghilang Kanker Rahim</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/mmMR78" rel="nofollow">Tips Pengobatan Penyakit</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/3gCLtY" rel="nofollow">Cara Pencegahan Dan Pengobatan Penyakit Diabetes</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/fPRtdV" rel="nofollow">Hilangkan Penyakit Dengan Herbal Ini</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/y0iok3" rel="nofollow">Obat TBC Kelenjar</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/nvJkJK" rel="nofollow">Tips Pengobatan Yang Aman Bagi Ibu Hamil</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/DbnK8e" rel="nofollow">Sembuhkan Wasir Dengan Ini</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/xGRM0r" rel="nofollow">Makanan Yang Di Sarankan Untuk Penderita Asma</a> keishkaylaaazzalea@gmail.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01381564380919953330noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-62050939952372154452011-01-13T14:42:22.255-08:002011-01-13T14:42:22.255-08:00This looks great. Like Erin I found myself questi...This looks great. Like Erin I found myself questioning how her boyfriend ended up in Tokoyo though. If you could fit that in somewhere I think it would make a big difference.Lisa Rogershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08537582027082671439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-38311946722286448102011-01-08T12:22:15.026-08:002011-01-08T12:22:15.026-08:00I agree with Kate's comments but overall, this...I agree with Kate's comments but overall, this pitch definitely has me interested in the novel. I like the title too [g]Deniz Bevanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17134553551048836979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-82358328715734904662011-01-05T14:09:57.499-08:002011-01-05T14:09:57.499-08:00Great to see you on here Brenda, and I love the ch...Great to see you on here Brenda, and I love the changes you've made to this since the last time I read. Definitely something I'd want to pick up!Claire Merlehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07566685720094646776noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-67450931855871708002011-01-05T07:39:34.472-08:002011-01-05T07:39:34.472-08:00I agree with Kate's comments. The hook in the ...I agree with Kate's comments. The hook in the first sentence could be a little stronger and I'd remove - just like he expects. I think you have good YA voice and the story sounds really interesting.<br /><br />My one question is how her crush unexpecidely ends up in Tokyo. Is it coincidental or on-purpose? <br /><br />Nice job and good luck!Erinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03263043246347529228noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-59349900156097739192011-01-05T06:12:30.310-08:002011-01-05T06:12:30.310-08:00I got to read this MS, and I am not a big fan of c...I got to read this MS, and I am not a big fan of contemporary novels, but this novel blew me away. <br /><br />Liam and Zoe are such great, real characters. I know this has nothing to do with the query. But I just wanted to throw that out there.Jennifer L. Armentrouthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00913648987251002847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-64008388910539325172011-01-05T05:09:34.025-08:002011-01-05T05:09:34.025-08:00You're so kind! Thank you! I'm doing revis...You're so kind! Thank you! I'm doing revisions to Snare as we speak, too (instead of cleaning my house or exercising) after a long hiatus from it, so we'll see how that goes. :)Brenda St John Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01995664320021950254noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-71794135649514784072011-01-05T05:00:23.725-08:002011-01-05T05:00:23.725-08:00Brenda's one to watch, folks. I've read on...Brenda's one to watch, folks. I've read one of her previous manuscripts, and I know she's one of those who'll get published. In fact, I hope to see her on the NYT bestseller's list someday!Disgruntled Bearhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17975975276659730388noreply@blogger.com