tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post3432747587692868599..comments2023-10-30T06:59:23.320-07:00Comments on Disgruntled Bear: Novel Pitch #7: THE DEMON VOWUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-37681298257693139012015-10-04T21:25:49.014-07:002015-10-04T21:25:49.014-07:00I say many thanks to Mr. admin website I read this...<br />I say many thanks to Mr. admin website I read this, because in this website I know a lot of information information that I did not know before his<br /><br /><a href="http://goo.gl/yAXg6c" rel="nofollow">Tips Pengobatan Benjolan Di Leher</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/BrBClM" rel="nofollow">Obat Penghilang Penyakit Batu Empedu</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/tepRzE" rel="nofollow">Terapi Penghilang Kanker Rahim</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/mmMR78" rel="nofollow">Tips Pengobatan Penyakit</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/3gCLtY" rel="nofollow">Cara Pencegahan Dan Pengobatan Penyakit Diabetes</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/fPRtdV" rel="nofollow">Hilangkan Penyakit Dengan Herbal Ini</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/y0iok3" rel="nofollow">Obat TBC Kelenjar</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/nvJkJK" rel="nofollow">Tips Pengobatan Yang Aman Bagi Ibu Hamil</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/DbnK8e" rel="nofollow">Sembuhkan Wasir Dengan Ini</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/xGRM0r" rel="nofollow">Makanan Yang Di Sarankan Untuk Penderita Asma</a> keishkaylaaazzalea@gmail.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01381564380919953330noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-26329822960942795892011-01-15T19:52:27.741-08:002011-01-15T19:52:27.741-08:00I hear you Rachel - I think I updated mine four ti...I hear you Rachel - I think I updated mine four times between my first post and yesterday. It's hard to get the hook and the flow just right.<br />One suggestion that helped me was realising that the query doesn't have to be 100 per cent factual; that was the mistake I kept making. I kept trying to make it a mini synopsis instead of concentrating on the tension and emotion that would draw a reader in.<br />All that said - I like the human and demon fighting over a body too, sounds interesting!Deniz Bevanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17134553551048836979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-60306772210322821972011-01-13T21:58:04.651-08:002011-01-13T21:58:04.651-08:00I did send an update on this to your email before ...I did send an update on this to your email before you put this up. A lot of the problems were fixed in it. Thanks for the crit though. I'll use what I can.Rachelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13813034388044650466noreply@blogger.com