tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post8084239350373169835..comments2023-10-30T06:59:23.320-07:00Comments on Disgruntled Bear: Query Critique #22Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-71691436106578919582010-10-24T20:06:04.490-07:002010-10-24T20:06:04.490-07:00Janet, this ROCKED. This gives story and voice (Pr...Janet, this ROCKED. This gives story and voice (Prince Boob!!). Well done.<br /><br />With the last paragraph, I'm wondering if you can play off the conflict he ends up with over who to save. <br /><br />Bob can save his father, or his country; protecting them both isn't possible, but neither is failure.<br /><br />Ok. That sucked. I really liked the bit with "that's all he's ever known," or however you said it. But I would try to juxtaposition the conflict at the end of the novel.<br /><br />Great job summing it up!Victoria Dixonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14012092208934951963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-50516450849342007752010-10-24T06:13:48.012-07:002010-10-24T06:13:48.012-07:00I love the sound of this query - it's definite...I love the sound of this query - it's definitely a book I would buy!Guineverehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10058786129073896210noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-33975102445699941702010-10-22T08:36:30.235-07:002010-10-22T08:36:30.235-07:00Great query and great re-work. Sounds like a fun ...Great query and great re-work. Sounds like a fun story. Prince Boob, poor guy. :)<br /><a href="http://lisadgibson.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow"><strong>Lisa ~ YA Literature Lover</strong></a>Lisa_Gibsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17238496789960349077noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-52785885365916617142010-10-21T17:30:32.687-07:002010-10-21T17:30:32.687-07:00I think this sounds great! I would love to read it...I think this sounds great! I would love to read it!Kimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09745302400759911758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-6030305197850238812010-10-21T15:25:51.314-07:002010-10-21T15:25:51.314-07:00This story sounds *really* cute! Prince Boob! Ah...This story sounds *really* cute! Prince Boob! Ahahaha!Emily Whitehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06478461123707071108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-73679168680747202892010-10-21T14:55:17.647-07:002010-10-21T14:55:17.647-07:00Yes, this must be very helpful to so many people.Yes, this must be very helpful to so many people.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07957545161716269528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3940033521354389119.post-58035279618775051772010-10-21T14:09:20.252-07:002010-10-21T14:09:20.252-07:00You are so nice to critique so many queries! Thank...You are so nice to critique so many queries! Thank you for the suggestions and thank you for your time. I really appreciate it. :)Janet Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12688012956157161889noreply@blogger.com