Wednesday, January 12, 2011

Novel Pitch #6: FRACTURED

When seventeen-year-old Meredith’s father dies, it feels like a part of her is buried with him. Forever. Then she meets Kaden. They spend hours together, talking, laughing, even enjoying the silence that can accompany holding hands or a gentle kiss. He makes sure she eats, gets enough sleep and smiles at least once a day. Meredith begins to share memories of her dad with him.

Sometimes, though, he is not the same Kaden. He snaps because she’s late. He's pushed and shaken her. He's even struck her. She wants to hold onto him, and doesn’t want to fall back into the darkness that gripped her after her Dad died. She tries to tell herself that the abuse is worth the hope he brings, fearing that if she leaves Kaden everything will fall apart again. 

FRACTURED is a 58,000-word contemporary YA novel. It will appeal to readers of Cupala’s Tell me a Secret and Dessen’s Dreamland.


The Good: I've got this MS queued up in my TBR file, and I'm looking forward to digging into it. I think the premise has a compelling realism, and this version of the pitch highlights a different side of the story.  


Suggestions: The opening needs more of a hook, and the MS is a bit on the short side at 58,000 words, although that's not far short of the 60,000 minimum standard for YA. but other than that, I think it sounds like a book Oprah would champion. 

4 comments:

brandileigh2003 said...

Thanks for doing this!

lexcade said...

Sounds like a really compelling read. And sad.

Deniz Bevan said...

It does sound compelling - but I wonder if there could be a little more of a hint of whether it ends on a sad note or high note.

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